Hi,

I liked the little game. The art style and sound reminded me a lot of "Serial Experiments Lain".
There were quite a lot of grammatical mistakes which made it hard to follow the plot.
I'm not sure if this is an option for you, but you could post the English transcript somewhere and people could highlight the parts that they did not understand. It might be easier then asking the players to name the exact/approximate place with the translation errors.

The scene transitions, where it just shows a screen with a Chinese character, please can you subtitle those?

There are quite a few errors, some of them are grammar, some of them... it's just hard to understand at all. Also, I like your minimal writing style, but sometimes this means it is hard to tell which character is talking. Also, sometimes the text is white on white, and difficult to read.

I second what tenshi_a said. There are a few grammatical errors that make the text hard to parse (mostly either lack of plurality or entirely missing words like in the bad/good girl sequence in the post-credits). And occasionally it's hard to tell who's speaking despite the color changes, though I think this can be solved with placing the characters names in the corner of the screen.

Use DeepL to translate the script, It would probably be better.
Right now it is very hard to understand.