RimWorld

RimWorld

Camping Tent
greatorder 1 Jul, 2024 @ 11:29am
Rewriting descriptions
I'm guessing English isn't the author's first language, so I figure some help with the descriptions would be useful since there's some weird syntax, grammar and spelling.

Canopy:
It's just better than nothing -> It's better than nothing.

Wooden Canopy:
A temporary wooden canopy,don't expect to sleep comfortably inside -> A temporary wooden canopy, don't expect to sleep comfortably inside it.

Teepee:
Just like how our ancestor lived -> Just like how our ancestors lived.

Tent:
A simple tent, just some sticks and a piece of cloth, how would it possibly go wrong ? -> A simple tent made of sticks and cloth. How could it possibly go wrong?

Viking Tent:
Tent with Reinforced wooden frame, common to see in some cold region -> A tent with a reinforced wooden frame. Used in some cold regions.

Modern Tent:
tent made with modern technology. Now you can just give up your bedroll -> A tent made with modern technology. No need for a bedroll now!

Camping Luggages -> Camping Luggage
some luggages which makes nearby tents a little bit more comfortable. Must be placed directly adjacent to the head of the tent. Placing more than one near the same tent has no effect. ->
Some luggage that makes nearby tents a bit more comfortable. Placing more than one near the same tent has no effect.

(I noticed the luggage acts like a dresser rather than an end table, so I removed the bit about needing to be next to the head of the tent)

WoodPile -> Wood Pile
A WoodPile. Gives a small comfort bonus to all nearby tents. Placing more than one near the same tent has no effect. -> A wood pile that makes nearby tents a bit more comfortable. Placing more than one near the same tent has no effect.
Last edited by greatorder; 1 Jul, 2024 @ 11:45am
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AOBA  [developer] 16 Jul, 2024 @ 9:26am 
suggestion received, thank you for your help.
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