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This went from a joke to an actual damn story, let me know if you liked it :D
The sounds this creature makes and how its armed with weapons really reminded me of the Combine from the half-life universe, which is why I choose'd half life. If you go ingame and load this map, you can't tell me that THAT creature doesn't look like something the combine would make. It almost fits in perfectly with my lore.
i made this to challenge Pootis Bird1's lore post
Recommendations: Fix all punctuation errors throughout your story
Correct all capitalization errors
There are many and's in your story, replace some of them with ","
Your supposed to write sentences, not paragraphs
Other than that, i'm impressed! Good work :D
Remember: A good writer really takes pride in their work, and will keep writing until their satisfaction is meet. If something feels wrong, they will keep rechecking and rewriting until their sense of error vanishes. I hope you learnt something!