@Brave_Slay

Thanks for your suggestions, Will keep them in mind in the future, Will be posting a ship in a few days, Maybe you could judge that ones description when its out heh

That's what comments are made for, I'm here to give suggestions and commentaries about this workshop file, a thread would've been better but i don't like them

That's rather irrelevant to the description above as it's uh, lacking sentences to actually determine way of speech, but just as another suggestion

@Brave_slay

I see what you mean, Also its kinda funny we talking about this in a comment section,

not exactly that, but the shortenings in particular

@Brave_Slay

When you say "Formal choice of grammar" Do you mean stuff such as "Plz enjoy this epic boat", Im not the best at english sorry

Also try using more formal choice of grammar when writing the description, so it's less taken as a joke.

@Brave_slay Most of my others ships got more information, I made these naval ships for fun and was tired when throwing together the description, Will try to keep it nicer in future builds, Thank you so much for the suggestions.

I don't ask you do it my way but I usually start with a ship's history or description, then specification, then armament, then operation if it's worth mentioning, then requirements, then credits, then notes, then plz enjoy. At last, "HMS Tempest" on the very top and it'd work as a headline for the ship's description or history.

@Brave_Slay

Thank you for the suggestions, Not all builders are this nice.

You should start with adding more information to the specifications, like Ship dimensions
Sort out the description and get rid of pointless headlines:
The name of the ship is already in the file name and in the thumbnail so just pasting it into the description standalone makes no sense.
Add a bit richer history at least by one or two sentences, it's not that hard and move it up above.
Move the specifications either below the ship's history/description or above it.
Armament*
Group up the notes for Infinite electric, reupload, issues and plz enjoy into single tab.
Get rid of excessive spacing between empty tabs that make it appear even more barren.

These are my suggestions how to improve in description writing and this one in particluar.

@Brave_slay

Im not the best with descriptions, Still learning. Also i love your ships

Obviously sarcastic description

@Brave_Slay

Do you mean this or is this sarcasm.

what an informative and convenient description you've got there

sik

Very Nice